that is why its free probally.

damn hippies.

is pandora the name of someone's cat?

How is some really good music not in the genome project?

lol, spoken like a man who's never been to Reno's old neighborhood

is it bad that i don't get a joke that is about me?

either that, or its a bad joke.

The jokes on this page do not meet the minimum lol quota of "1" please read and evaluate your jokes before posting.

i just got wyman's joke. its excellent and delivered a lol quotient > 1

neither did that.

failed at failing

Dnky did you get my 3 cents

yep. still cant do anything with 6 cents tho.

fml

not directly about you



:sigh:




Funny cause it's over

Ok wait if you just click here and login as me (username IFTN password poglol) then click the link, it should work. Please do it people I want opinions!

d/l now,

What genre is it? What are your song writing goals?

Genre I guess is acoustic singer/songwriter? Song writing goals are to write songs that people enjoy listening to and hopefully some can relate to.

see edit plz that I just did

initial review

I honestly didn't hear any of the lyrics but I was surfing but I do know this, it was really catchy, that much I could tell, I was getting into it without even knowing what you were saying.

I'd really like a lyric sheet to give it a proper listen.

I guess I could type them out but hopefully my pronunciation is pretty clear (as long as you can understand a british accent )

edit; just saw your above post, I'll type them out now

lol @ crosspost

I'm a visual person, also the accent thing is a big factor, you can pm them if you don't want them here. I was impressed though overall.

You can't just do that, you know.
We have feelings too.
You make a mockery of everything we stand for, then you act like it's not you.

And we all hope, it's gonna turn around.
But I'm not so sure, cus I don't think you understand the consequences of your actions.

You've got it all worked out,
With your tricks and your lies.
You have them wrapped around your little finger every single time,
And nothing's changed.

And we all hope, it's gonna turn around.
But I'm not so sure, cus I don't think you understand the consequences of your actions.

And it's happening again, he's falling for you
You've broken his heart, and now that you're through
We are alone, it's just us two
And there is nothing I can do
I'm falling for your traps again, and there is nothing anyone can do
Cus I don't think you understand the consequences of your actions x4
I don't think you understand at all


Edit: in case you couldnt tell it's about girls who pull guys and then never follow up (give a fake number or w/e)

Ok,

I really like the ending, its gets my attention and I'm singing along.

However the weird part I found was how you said 'we' a few times. I get the gist that your talking about girls in general who blow off guys. But this line

You make a mockery of everything we stand for, then you act like it's not you.

makes me think the song is going to be political because it seems like someone is going after 'everything you stand for' if you catch my drift.

Then when you say

And we all hope, it's gonna turn around.

again, the plural aspect makes me support the previous notion

You've got it all worked out,
With your tricks and your lies.
You have them wrapped around your little finger every single time,
And nothing's changed.

this again, kinda supports that notion


then we don't get that its really a love song until


And it's happening again, he's falling for you
You've broken his heart, and now that you're through

you make it singular again.



But overall I think its really good, I think you got a solid basis for good song writing. I wrote a song about 15 years ago but I lost it. I am terrible at music but I enjoy song lyrics probably more than the music itself.

What is the song writing scene like over the pond? I don't know much about the rock / pop songwriting scene here but I know the country song writing scene is huge and there are a tonne of people who are on paid contracts just to write songs and its a decent living.

something about the vocals I don't like

Wow thanks for the response, I really appreciate it. No one I've shown any songs too before has ever said anything more than "nice" or "I like it" or whatever. Ok, so the "we" bit comes from the fact it's about a mutual friend of a circle of friends who are all worried about their friend being a "slut" or whatever and not ever going to end up in a proper relationship. The line "it goes against everything we stand for" is hinting that generally my friends are all people who care very much about other's feelings and we are generally a very happy bunch who rarely fall out/ upset each other etc.

Then when it goes on to say he and I etc, it's like a twist in the song showing that I'm not just concerned about her/ the boys she does it too, but the fact she's done the same to me.

And yeah, I too agree that the ending to the song is by far the strongest part (which imo is a good thing becasue people come away thinking it was good even if they weren't too keen on the first bit)

As to the song writing scene in the UK, I honestly have no idea. I've never performed as a singer/songwriter and I don't really go to many gigs of bands that aren't big and mainstream.

Like the melody or the lyrics? Or just my voice in general?

melody is decent and the lyrics are ok, for me the melody matters more though

I don't know about your voice, it sounds like you hold back and it doesn't flow right on some spots.. the guitar also overpowers your voice way too much, maybe you should try to record them seperately and then add together or something