You are looking to get all girls, white girls included. Again I would add a pic with you and some white friends and probably remove the flower pic.

I think your profile pic is good, and the graduation photo with those girls is an excellent inclusion. Having this, I think you can get rid of the girl w/flowers photo.

Given its emphasis on you profile, and the fact that playing pro baseball is really hard to do, girls are going to pounce on that....so if you are lying you'd better be ready to back it up.

That "You should message me" line looks familiar! (Not that I care, or that's it's particularly creative in the first place)

I probably would narrow it even if I was into the GILFs

Do you have any pics of you wearing a kilt with your hair down?
There's usually red flags in the profile that will tip you off. Try to avoid the girls who dress like they're high maintenance, but don't have the income for it, and the ones that have terrible grammar/spelling. Consider looking for girls who appeal to your intellectual side.

Didn't see this the first time, but it looks weird that you're only looking for new friends.

fyp

I put the maximum age range it would allow in I really don't care about age as long as there isn't a rediculous difference. I've knocked it down to 50. I've seen a few hot 40+ year olds so I don't want to exclude them.


I do have some kilt pics. The hair is staying tied up for now though. The last hairdresser completely ****ed it up so I'm waiting for it to grow out.



I'll probably put a proper kilt picture up at some point.

Primary picture is bad. Its blurry and makes you look effeminate. I honestly thought you were a girl from the thumbnail. You bought a DSLR? Take a picture with it.

Self summary is ok but ellipses and emoticons are for girls.

Remove the "I'm working for a bank at the moment." How does this attract women in the least?

Most of the rest is pretty good.

Same with the "on a typical friday night" entry. The mindset here is "If I was a potential date, would I find this stuff attractive or even mildly interesting". Do you think some chick is really thinking "I need to find a guy who says he's studying on a friday night"? Stop being honest, start trying to attract people. Who cares if WTF is in your online dating profile is true or not. Get a date and start from there.

might aswell join in too. any advice is appreciated.

http://www.okcupid.com/profile/Crispin1003

None of your photos are bad but i think the last two make you look way better. I would go with just them but thats just personal preference.

Some spelling mistakes to fix...

competitive
'weather' should be 'whether'
'loose' should be 'lose'

Ty for the feedback. Will correct the grammar. Too reliant on spell check.

Did you type this profile on your phone? Use some punctuation!

Also, don't start your profile with "Hi there ladies".

As a general tip for anyone on OKC, if you can't think of anything good to answer for one of the questions, skip the question rather than putting down something lame. The question will not appear on your profile, so most people viewing your profile won't even realize it was skipped.

Crispin reminded me of this when he answered "far too many things" to the "what do you spend a lot of time thinking about" question.

Thx nick. Honestly I think this is harder than pickin up girls at the pub/bar. Too much to think about and yes it was filled out on an iPad.

Thanks guys.

I've knocked out the Friday night section for now.

sounds like she just wants to chat via email to get to know you a bit, before talking to you on the phone. unless i'm misunderstanding what you wrote.

Also, in your first pic, the caption says at the end, "Obviously it was her Idea. I not that vein lol."

Make the 'I' in 'Idea' lowercase. Add the word 'am' in the middle of 'I not.' And it's 'vain,' not 'vein' here.

I wondered about that, too. She did specifically say she would up for 'chatting' or meeting up. I guess by chatting she might have thought I meant email. English is not her first language, too, so that throws another wrench in there. Hell, I might as well ask her to meet up now to avoid confusion.

I like the cover pic, but it could be brighter.

"After living in NYC...MY whole life," not 'your.'

Just say you're good at poker, not poker chip tricks. That sounds like saying you're good at being a clown

"...feel like saying "Hi," please do!" (I know, I'm a nit)

Take out income.

You might want to caption the pic with the pregnant girl. It just makes people wonder. I remember I gave a picture to a new boyfriend one time and he was like, "WTF, you gave me a pic with you and another guy!" The guy was my brother. I thought it was obvious (we look alike), but I was wrong.

The last pic doesn't look authentic, even though I love the look on your face.

Racist.

Yup- I had this problem using sarcasm w/ girls a few years ago bc I didn't change my tone enough and none of them ever got it. I normally play it safe on this end now, especially in textual situations.

If this is a consistent trend for you, I'm guessing you're doing something early on that gives them the impression that you might say yes.

Wow, you look like my husband. You might want to explain the sign you are holding as those of us not familiar with it might not get the significance. Maybe crop it to above your knees. That pose looks odd.

I'm not sure if it's the Scottish English or what, but it seems kind of awkward to me. I can't exactly put my finger on it, there are a few things. It may be just as an American reading it.

You are really considering women up to 50? Wow, good on you, mate!

Religion: Atheism and laughing about it! is a huge turn-off to me, but that could just personal, idk.

Job description is a turn-off, too. Sounds like you are a clerk/assistant/secretary or something right out of high school. Maybe just use something more general.

I like all of your pics for the most part. Maybe it's because you look like Glenn (which isn't my type at all, but he won my heart long before I saw him in person), so YMMV.

http://www.okcupid.com/profile/tallhandsomnerd

May as well link my profile. I'm happy with where it is now, plus my respond rate is down to yellow!

The Wire is good, but you could really use more Radiohead in that section

"i am quite competative" is "I am quite competitive."

"What I’m doing with my life-
Ill be chilling in florida for the next month or so. Gettin some sun and relaxing hell yeah." I don't like this. At all.

Your English, grammar and punctuation is really bad. I'm not sure why. Some things you get right, then other, seemingly easy stuff is way off. I don't think you are an unintelligent guy, but some of it sounds awkward.

I like all of the pics except the up-the-nose pic and the caption on the drinking pic.

Felicia,

Is this because you are religious and would not want to date an atheist, or for some other reason?