Started in school and continued in my study of math and physics

Or started in school and continued in my math and physics studies

Either way, you need to leave out " the" before "school," and I wouldn't repeat "study of" twice.

Agree with LKJ, it's hard to make suggestions going back and forth between the image and a post, especially on my phone.

There's a typo in the last paragraph-- "career"

the school = school
math = maths (not in the US, but British English is standard in Germany I believe)
remains also = also remains
put an "and" before efficiency of cyclons
calculation of = calculating the. The rest of the sentence is a bit weird though and I might rewrite it. A local pulse of what, where?
variety = a variety
reactor = a reactor
few monthes = a few months
consulter = consultant
for me = to me
knowlege = knowledge
carrere perspectives = career opportunities (my suggestion)

These are the changes I would make, nitting it up with Oxford comma discussions etc probably isn't necessary when this will be read by someone whose English is worse than yours anyway.

Super (in the last paragraph) is an unusual word to use in formal writing in that context. I'd go with just very interesting, or extremely interesting if you want the extra emphasis

Date is "October" in English, vice "Oktober."

I would say "...and continued throughout my study of math..." though "in" is not wrong. Using "in" makes it kind of sound like "even though I did these things, it still didn't kill my interest in modeling."

I assume that the people offering this position know what a "diploma" is, correct? If this is for Americans or Brits, you might have to explain it.

"The theme of mathematical modeling continues also in my positions in industry."

Seems like there should be a "the" in front of HISMELT, but I'm not sure.

Amazingly enough, you can take a "the" out. It is not needed before "net generation."

"... it offers the possibility..."

carrere career

Everything else looks great!

Gregorio got to super before me. I'd also lead with why you are interested in the position, move the last paragraph up to first.

Best of luck with the position, let us know how it goes.

"the rule of thumb", not "the rule of THE thumb"

lapka,


I didn't know you were into modeling. I would guess you're kind of a Heidi Klum type, yes?

Sorry, should have thought about it myself.

Application as modelling and simulation expert XXXXXXX


Dear Sir or Madam,

My fascination with mathematical modelling of the real world started in school and continued throughout my study of math (diploma in numerical solution of partial differential eqiuations) and physics (diploma and PhD in theoretical solid state physics).

The theme of mathematical modelling continues in my positions in industry. 90% of my time as RD senior engineer at XXXXXXX was dedicated to CFD simulations of plant processes. I worked with Fluent, openFoam and Barracuda. Examples of CFD projects I worked on are: fluidized and fixed bed reactors, efficiency and scale-up of a gas cooler, distribution of mass flow and pressure for the correct dimensioning of equipment, mixing of slurry in a sedimentation reactor and efficiency of cyclons. In my last project at XXXXXX one of my tasks was calculating the distribution of sugar in a complicated geometry reactor with rheologically non-linear filling. I am familiar with a variety of different metallurgic processes and reactors from rotary kiln to the newest one of its kind - HISMELT - a reactor for iron smelting. During my work at XXXXXXXXX I have spent a few months as a consultant in Kwinana at the HISMELT plant.

The validaion, interpretation and presentation of the results was another part of my duties. I am familiar with Gambit, snappyHexMesh and DesignModeller for net generation. I have used Paraview, Python scripts and built-in Fluent tools for postprocessing.

The position at XXXX is extremely interesting to me since it offers a possibility to apply all my knowledge with further career opportunities in an international environment.

with kind regards Dr. lapka

HUGE HUGE thank you guys!

Will update on how it goes.

Dids, dids, dids.......

I know you can do better. A bunch of people here have seen my picture.

I will think of something additional for the first paragraph, to the why I am interested. Have to dig internet a little bit more for the infos.

Tx.

Should this say "this industry"?

I'm guessing this is supposed to be "validation." My confidence is only shaken because everyone else passed over it.

Anyway, the other input you've gotten is good, even if I'm disappointed that I can't spot a single exclamation mark or emoji.

Thank you!

More eyes always see more, even if all other people are also very good.

"In industry" is standard as a counterpoint to "in academe" or "in government service," etc.

My eyes blipped right over a couple of typos, including "validaion." Not sure if it was the font, or if I just assumed spell check was on.

For complete assurance of correct spelling, send a copy to MLYLT for a spellcheck.

Neeee, but I realized the wisdom of running it through spellchecker. I was setting the text in Latex without built-in spellchecker. Don't tell me that it is not smart. I realize it now.

Is it meant to be Universal or US English?

If Universal then "maths" rather than "math"

Should be 22 October 2018 (no dot, "c" instead of "k"), will differ if US English.

"super interesting" is slang. You should modify "interesting" with an adverb instead, such as "extremely"

"at school" would be Universal English.

"a pulse of it" i.e. a pulse of sugar sounds wrong - should this mean something like after the sugar has been subjected to a pulse of something else?

There are two kinds of "ing" words, verbal nouns and gerunds. Where the "ing" word is being used as a verbal noun it behaves much more like a noun - consider:

I watched the grand opening of parliament. ("opening" is preceded by "the", the thing that is opened has to be preceded by "of" as the noun "opening" can't have a direct object, and opening is modified by "grand", an adjective)

John opening the door grandly all the time really pisses me off. (Here "opening" is more like a verb as it has a conventional subject and object and is modified by an adjective - however it is still somewhat like a noun in that it functions as the subject of the verb "pisses" in the wider sentence - some argue that the "John" should be "John's" as in the possessive form as they say the ing form is always a noun but don't explain why that usage is not natural to native speakers unless they have been trained specifically and why it's ok for the ing form to have a direct object but not a subject)

So in conclusion, a good rule of thumb is either "the"-"ing"-"of" or only "ing"

"the mathematical modelling of"

"equation"

Rather than "theme" don't you mean something more like "field" "area" or "topic"?

Is this in response to a specific advert. If so I would start with "I'm writing to express my great interest in the position as (job title) advertised (where)"

Also you could write "I enclose my CV" or some such as it's meant to be a cover letter for a CV.

EDIT just seen others have replied

Tyra Banks?

I disagree on the conclusion of the "use of the with ing words" discussion. If one uses "of," one does not necessarily need "the" as well. Mathematical modeling is an action. It does not require "the" in front of it, even if we add "of the real world" after it.

In fact, while not incorrect, adding "the" there is pretty clunky construction.

Oops, thought this thread wad going to be a about a TV character from long ago who seemed like the original poster. Oh well.

I would say closer, although I somehow never thought about if I look similar to a model. Totally new direction for me.

Do you know "A model " from kraftwerk? They have a couple of old shots that I like, but I still wouldn't identify myself with them.

Naaaa. I prefer create models and not being a model. That on top to really not having required looks.

*I prefer to create models, or I prefer creating models... On top of not having the required looks.

The emoji is fine though.

That is the true reason why I like emojis.

Lektor you like always add major value.

It should be Universal English. Company is Belgian. So no native speakers.

Clearly "field" is better fit. Your starting sentence is much better than all my ideas. And I totally appreciate the time you have invested to explain the " - ing " .