No one has offered to help yet. What more could I be doing? I was thinking about using a resume/cv service, but I am kinda a penny pincher--especially now.

You could post a [redacted] version of your cv and maybe you'll get feedback from people who wouldn't bother PMing you to offer help. You could also read some more quotations.

I wrote bab's resume because I'm in sales and he is an embarrassment, so improving it in 5 mins wasn't difficult at all.

Would gladly offer some help, but I don't know what your hiring managers are looking for.

Writing resumes for people in general isnt very fun so I'm sure it's nothing personal. Post a generic version itt.

just post it here. I mean you can edit away all sensitive info. I would definitely read it and if I see something also write it.

I am/ was also job searching. I have now a position starting on the first of july, but I continue to look for alternatives. I haven't read the whole thread, but with Gas Oil industry you have to look how to sell it. I mean it is not booming now.

I have also used a coach to work on my resume and cover letter. For me was totally worth the investment. But you have to choose carefully if you decide to use such service. There are a lot of not so good on the market.

I am a passionate Engineer looking for a leadership position and a fulfilling career.


EDUCATION:Bachelor of Science in Mechanical Engineering
EIT-XXXXX
Certified Level II Vibration Analysist'

SKILLS
PROFILE:

Computer: AutoCAD, Solid Works, Inventor, Pro-E, Microsoft Word, Power Point, Excel, Lab VIEW, HoneyWell DAQ, EES, CNC Programming, Sigma Nest, Windrock Analyzer, and SKF

Codes and Standards: ASME Sec 8 Div II(Vessels), ASME B3.1.1 / 31.3/ 31.8 (Piping), TEMA (Heat Exchangers), API (Pumps), ISO
WORK

EXPERIENCE:
Project Manager:
My responsibilities included assisting with Mechanical Engineering and bid estimates for ongoing projects including sizing and selecting pumps, heat exchangers, and valves; checking PID’s, ISO’s and vessel dwgs. Also, I lead a team in creating and organizing the Engineering department, Engineering Standards and Procedures.

Project Engineer:
As a project engineer I lead an engineering team to meet contract deliverables (P&IDS, GA’s, Vessel Dwgs, BOM’s, QA/QC Document, ect). My responsibilities included planning and organizing all engineering and fabrication aspects, and ensuring that all contractual and specification requirements are met. I assigned engineering task to a team of electrical, process, and mechanical engineers while handling all the major equipment including pumps, engines, heat exchangers, electric heaters, vessels, etc. My responsibilities also include directly communicating with customers for progress/scheduling, project clarifications, and budgetary issues.

Reliability Engineer:
My primary job functions were to perform thermodynamic cycle and vibration test on natural gas compressors and gas turbines. I analyzed data collected, determine root cause failures, wrote reports on the equipment describing the corrective action if needed, created work orders for repairs, and coordinated with maintenance to resolve any issues with the equipment.

Engineering Intern:
I worked with the Performance Testing Group, which supported the lignite power plants in performance management. We traveled to plant sites and completed on site testing and experimentation followed by writing guidance reports.

Engineering Coop:
My responsibilities included drafting and designing natural gas compressors using Solid Works and implementing calculations for hp, flow rates, head losses, beam supports, vibrations, etc.

you should put what school your degree is from

I removed school, companies, and dates for this thread.

Yeah that's nonsense -- I'm pretty hot.

The resume needs a tune-up grammatically and stylistically. For instance, the past tense form of 'lead' is 'led', 'on site testing' should be 'on-site testing', the first sentence after "Project Manager" is awkward, and the
punctuation beside "Codes and Standards" is spaced wonkily.

(I just skimmed random paragraphs, so there probably are other things you could fix.)

I think this should be "etc.", unless ect is an abbreviation related to your deliverables.

I'm no resume expert, but FWIW I'd use bullet points.

Project Manager:

• Assist [is there a verb you could use here that is stronger than "assist"] with Mechanical Engineering and bid estimates for ongoing projects including sizing and selecting pumps, heat exchangers, and valves; and checking PID’s, ISO’s and vessel dwgs.
• Lead a team in creating and organizing the Engineering department, Engineering Standards and Procedures.

Project Engineer:

• Lead an engineering team to meet contract deliverables (P&IDS, GA’s, Vessel Dwgs, BOM’s, QA/QC Document, etc.)
• Planned and organized all engineering and fabrication aspects, and ensured that all contractual and specification requirements are met.
• Assigned engineering tasks to a team of electrical, process, and mechanical engineers while handling all the major equipment including pumps, engines, heat exchangers, electric heaters, vessels, etc.
• Communicated directly with customers regarding progress/scheduling, project clarifications, and budgetary issues.

etc

Not sure how much your resume has to do with things, though. It seems like you're in a pretty specialized field, and either you're gong to have the skills they're looking for or not. It's not like Tbab's which was more putting lipstick on a pig.

I see lots of responsibilities listed, but not a lot of achievements. Are their any specific achievements you could highlight, something like, "Lead a team in creating and organizing the Engineering department, Engineering Standards and Procedures that reduced expenses by 10% while increasing productivity by 20%."

You need to find ways to present your skills and experience that convince people in commercial construction, hvac, medical device design, and elevator design that your skills and experience do transfer over to those fields. Unfortunately I know nothing about your field or those ones so I can't help with that.

MLY,

First, what Rei said. Some of this stuff (specific wording/style) is not that big a deal for a technical role, but every little thing counts. Other stuff shows a lack of attention to detail, which I imagine is important in this type of role.

"Analysist" -> analyst
"I lead a team" -> I led a team
Lots of past/present tense mismatches

"I am a passionate Engineer looking for a leadership position and a fulfilling career." -> That is terrible, sounds like generic Hallmark card resume objective. Write something specific about what you want to lead/do.

Here is the most important piece of feedback, though:

ADD SPECIFICS TO YOUR EXPERIENCE SECTIONS

Size/scope/budget of projects, number of engineers managed, etc. The more specific detail, the better. And highlight specific successes/accomplishments. What got done better, cheaper, faster, etc thanks to your work?

MLYLT are you still jealous that your boyfriend is banging his sister?

Get rid of your objective/greeting. It doesn't serve a purpose, and wastes space.

It should be a brief overview of your qualifications. I.e. "Mechanical engineer (EIT) with x years experience in (provide experience). Knowledgeable with (list codes)

Right now I'm jealous that he is driving 1 1/2 hrs to mow his mothers lawn; his sister still lives there. Heaven forbid he let a princess get her hands dirty and mow a 20'x20' lawn.
I actually just posted a video of a one legged man mowing on my facebook, and insinuated that she get motivated.....didn't work.

Contrary to what I posted earlier itt, maybe you were hot and getting by on looks, but the Dallas sun was not kind to you.

Thanks for the feedback guys. I'll do a rewrite and post.

Agree with removing the first paragraph. I hate to see it on CVs as it is generally just 50 people all writing the same thing. If you are applying for a management role in an engineering field then no need to tell them that - CV experts might disagree on this. But no one is ever writing about being demotivated, lazy, etc

Get rid of things like "excel, word, powerpoint". Go with what is outside of the box for nowadays and crucial for you job, not things that were "wow factor" 15 years ago. If you have any qualifications in things like AutoCad, etc, AND THEY ARE RELEVANT to the role, maybe list them but only if they are well above normal certs

Only list your HS (if even that), College/Uni and post 3rd level names & dates. Only list College/Uni+ results, do not post HS results. I have seen a ton of CVs where people in the mid-late 20s are listing their results for national exams at the ages of 16 & 18 (Ireland)

If you are young, and your field is generally made up of older individuals, then remove your DOB from your CV - yes they can probably guess it from your educational experience, but just leave it off. It negatively affects your chances in general

Things like having a "normal" email address (firstname.lastname@gmail.com, etc) is pretty relevant too. If you have your own domain name, that obviously links to your name or work then that looks better. I have seen a bunch of CVs that have email addresses listed, which were clearly created when the person was 14 - does not look good

Most likely no one cares if you have a "Full clean, driver's license" for the jobs that you are applying for - if you had such stuff in there

Keep the bs to a minimum. I will always call people out on their CV, by asking them questions to what they have listed on it, indirectly, and and see what their reply is

Clean up grammar etc as people said. Bullet points are useful. 2 pages maximum

A big thing is to tailor the CV to the role thats listed - I assume that most of the jobs you are going for are similar and it can be a pain to edit it each time, but it does matter

This is just my opinion coming from having looked at a couple of hundred CVs for a few roles I have worked in

Really?

You should prob concern yourself with things that actually matter rather than actively trying to get your BF's family to dislike you.

You really really need someone to look over that resume. You should be focusing on results (how much time/money/effort you save the company, other positive benefits of your work) as opposed to what boring **** you did.

If you specify deliverables - "ensured continual function of natural gas compressors and gas turbines through comprehensive investigation, testing and coordination of assets" - it sounds way better than what you said.

If you lost zero hours due to your diligence throw that in. People love hearing about tangible results from your efforts.

Also the grammar is horrendous

MLY,


Grando seems to understand your business much better than I do, but that's exactly what I meant with my primary suggestion.

Great thanks. I have a phone interview tomorrow(screening type), so I'm going to rework my resume and ask if I can send the updated one for them to give to the hiring manager. This is an interview with one of the companies I interned with, so my skills are definitely relevant. Fingers crossed!

grunching. And I am not from USA, so may be I don't get some specifics.

First sentence is horrible. Focus should be on what you can deliver.
Make it somehow better readable may be some paragraphs or bullet points.

Then if you send an application to a specific position, then you should somehow highlight relevant skills. May be give more details what relevant you have done. I mean so it is very general. It gives a lot of details which are not interesting for some industries. Tailor it to the position.

May be include some results, examples. So it somehow says nothing about how good did you perform.

Just finished the interview, and I didn't get a chance to offer to send my new resume. Ugg. Some of the questions really tripped me up. I'm fine talking about equipment and testing, but when asked creative type questions I get so tripped up. The worst was, "what does continuos improvement mean to you?"