Originally Posted by Zomboid!
We need more character development of chubs90. Its hard to get invested in the tale without some character backstory. For instance, why does he have a weight problem? Is it glandular? Has he been crippled in some way, and is unable to exercise? Has he tried diet after diet, only to gain it all back?
Also, I'd rethink the title. "Adventures" is a pretty strong word to describe someone sitting in front of a computer for ten hours. How about "pathetic life"?
Good advice, and it I think it should be adventures, with all the advice I got I'm gonna redo it from scratch, give the back story and take it from there.
Even though it's a bag s**t I had fun doing it and learn alot from how to maybe make a better one.