The Adventures of Chubs90: The Donkament Chroncles - Page 2

bad jaws horn · 07-09-2012, 10:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Diet Ketchup

Just get on skype lol, I'm waiting for you unless you blocked me?

wow omg is it who i think it is? I aint been on for about a year when i get pms drop me your addy il get back on it new account etc

and sorry about your comic didnt even read it just put you on blast when i saw join date

Diet Ketchup · 07-09-2012, 10:11 PM

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Originally Posted by TimDwayne

I'm trying to understand but I don't.

Rad Jownsab itt?

It's just part one or a ''pilot'' Basically its about a time i put everything I had into a donkament and made a final table, it would become alot more apparent in future parts loool

Diet Ketchup · 07-09-2012, 10:12 PM

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Originally Posted by bad jaws horn

wow omg is it who i think it is? I aint been on for about a year when i get pms drop me your addy

and sorry about your comic didnt even read it tbf!

yer buddy it's me. and no worries it is pretty crap to be honest but I was bored and had fun doing it

pm me

bad jaws horn · 07-09-2012, 10:15 PM

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Originally Posted by Diet Ketchup

yer buddy it's me. and no worries it is pretty crap to be honest but I was bored and had fun doing it

pm me

yeah will do mate hope things are going good for you

theichimaru · 07-10-2012, 05:30 AM

good production values on the strip, nice colours and i laughed at the donks face

but the rest of it is quite bad and you should feel bad. Could do much better

R. Tenshin-Hore · 07-10-2012, 05:36 AM

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Originally Posted by Diet Ketchup

It's my comic, this is part 1

EDIT: Spelt thread title wrong please correct mods ^^

The very, very least of your problems

BokBokBok · 07-10-2012, 05:40 AM

Pro Tip: Anytime you need to include arrows to direct your reader in a comic, your layout is poor.

chairmo · 07-10-2012, 06:08 AM

Lose the arrows. I like the artwork.

I think you have moved the story along too quickly. It's hard to care much about the hero with little backstory.

The first few episodes should build up your characters and provide background.

CrazyDiam0nd · 07-10-2012, 06:17 AM

Very low content and too many things to divert my attention. Like those fookin unnecessary arrows man. its all so clogged up without much of a story.

looking forward to reading a poker comic like +EV. Its about time.

Haarlem91 · 07-10-2012, 08:21 AM

I sort of like it

Chindo_Nights · 07-10-2012, 08:30 AM

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Originally Posted by Diet Ketchup

Hi ty, it's just part 1, the story would become alot more clear in 2 and 3. Basically I am Chubs90 (my screen name) and just wanted to make a comic about myself and base it on things that have happened to me playing poker and try and make it funny at the same time (which has clearly failed so far

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I think you'd have to be throughly retarded to NOT be able to follow it tbh

It's pretty simple. It's moderately humourous. I like the "i'm ATC tonight" ref as I've seen that in donkaments. 6.5/10 and promising IMO

^^^chairmo's feedback is the money TBH

[x]will read more

Reaper421 · 07-10-2012, 09:26 AM

I scrolled all the way down here, now where the **** is part 2?

Diet Ketchup · 07-10-2012, 02:03 PM

Thanks for the good and bad comments dudes it's all welcome. I've never made one before and just done it how I wanted to, the story is rushed etc but I only made 6 box's

should have done a better introduction. As someone said it is just part 1... a story would sort of develop down the line but I don't think there's much point now as the first one was such a lead balloon LOL

Diet Ketchup · 07-10-2012, 02:05 PM

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Originally Posted by chairmo

Lose the arrows. I like the artwork.

I think you have moved the story along too quickly. It's hard to care much about the hero with little backstory.

The first few episodes should build up your characters and provide background.

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Originally Posted by Chindo_Nights

I think you'd have to be throughly retarded to NOT be able to follow it tbh

It's pretty simple. It's moderately humourous. I like the "i'm ATC tonight" ref as I've seen that in donkaments. 6.5/10 and promising IMO

^^^chairmo's feedback is the money TBH

[x]will read more

Your feedbacks good thanks guys

bad jaws horn · 07-10-2012, 02:10 PM

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Originally Posted by Diet Ketchup

Thanks for the good and bad comments dudes it's all welcome. I've never made one before and just done it how I wanted to, the story is rushed etc but I only made 6 box's

should have done a better introduction. As someone said it is just part 1... a story would sort of develop down the line but I don't think there's much point now as the first one was such a lead balloon LOL

dont give up bro, it could have been a work of genious but no one is going to be a nice about it here. Put the next one out you have nothing to lose imo

if its based of true stories and if i remeber some you told me, then its got potential