Set to the beat in this video:




*start at 0:12*

Grinding on my own dime, in my own free time.
Got nothing left but a sign that says, I'm losing my damn mind.
Working for a living, but ain't living, merely existing.
Something gotta switch, gotta change, I feel I'm twisting in the wind.
In the breeze, make me fall upon my knees, begging please
Change the track, get me back to where I should be.
You say you can't help, I gotta do this on my own, which is ****ing cool.
Cause I got this ****, can't change my basic rules. Which state.
I'm a mother****ing man of the world, working towards the dream they sold us.
They've given me all the tools, all I know, is that I'm fueled, by the dream I'm not living
I know that it sounds old school.
But I'm new, and it's like the glue
That holds us, has dried up and become useless, and thats true
But it's like a game of chess, King me, and I will never rest until.
I own the board, own the world, I just want to be the king. And you cannot stop me.

*break from 1:00 to 1:23*

12 years in, and I'm pushing for the ****ing gold.
I know that I'm getting old, but I feel I've been paroled.
From purgatory, and I am breaking out the mold.
That made me, who I am, and I am taking ahold.
Of the situation, even though it's growing so cold.
Winter is a mother****er, but I'm so ****ing bold.
I'm ready to break out, and no longer be under your control.
I know that you think you own me, but I cannot be told.
WHo I am, what I am, and what I'm supposed to do.
You think you know me better than I do, but you're kidding yourself.
You'll rue the day you said you're through.
With me, whatcha gonna do, when nobody'll stand beside you.
To thineself you must be true.
I loved you, with my whole heart, despite our differences.
Like Jehovahs witnesses, we're knocking on your door.
To let us in, and let me spread the word.
That I love you, and I will never be deterred.

Wow I really like the lyrics. Read them first and then watched the vid. I don't think the lyrics you wrote feel right in a rap song. When I sang it in my head I was thinking something along the lines of Brand New.

So you think the lyrics fit more in a punky/poppy sound, than in a rap song?

Not knocking your thoughts at all. that's why I posted this. I'm only 2/3rds done or so...so it's still a work in progress. Any thoughts are greatly appreciated.

Yeah kinda, but if that's not your style then that's cool

Do you have any music laid down with this?

No, I laid down the lyrics I have...then I found a beat on youtube similar to what I had in my head. Once I listened to the video in OP, I reworked the lyrics a small bit, and that's what I have so far.

All lyric suggestion/help threads must include the suggestion of the phrase 'lovepump'

needs more lovepump

I ****ing love you!!!!!!!!!!!

Yes, I agree with you on the lyrics not quite fitting the whole song - but disagree on it being anything but rap. When I first sang it in my head, I sang it in rap.

I think OP just needs to tweak the lyrics a bit, get them in tune with the music.

I edited a few words out (in silver) n' imo, it works.

sample: (starts at 12secs in)

"Grinding on my own dime, in my own free time.
Got nothing left but a sign that says, I'm losing my - damn mind."

Here's without the words in:


"Grinding on my own dime, in my own free time.
Got nothing but a sign says I'm losing my - damn mind."

p.s: I can give better advice, if you sing it for me!

from the look of the structure you might be doing what we call "rapping too hard"

Can you explain this in a little more detail?

is this a level?


op-feels like your trying to rhyme too much