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Originally Posted by chopstick
Stopped watching about 2/3rds of the way through.
Ideas for things that could be improved:
- intro is way too long, shorten it
- add some kind of voiceover to the intro explaining the purpose of the vid
- lose the intro music or up its sound quality
- vid is waaaaay too dark, this is probably the thing most in need of fixing
- don't reference a list so obviously
- be more engaging, you sound bored
- lose the X/5 graphic popups
- show something other than you standing on a roof the entire time
You clearly have a lot of good information to convey, but need some practice with delivery. The quality of the production values, especially the overall darkness, really detracts from the content of your message.
Hey thanks for the constructive feedback, I think you make some good pts
Ill try and address them all since you took the time
- Ok maybe 30 or 40 seconds would be better
- Good idea to express the purpose of the vid in first 5 seconds
- I will have to invest in some better camera/audio equipment, I noticed this myself in the last interview did, the subpar audio quality really detracts from it.
- This comes back to better equipment, I want to invest in a camera with a flip up monitor.
- I think I could make each point in a separate take (I can easily memorize 1 pt at a time so as not to need a reference sheet), and move to different locations which also addresses last bullet
- I will work on adding a little more enthusiasm and vocal variety
- Maybe I could just include a quick report card slide at the end with a tally
Thanks again, I'll try to improve these things the best I can in forthcoming reviews.